as the door closed
(poem / 2007)
and the crickets chorused her words
and the symphonies in minor keys
stayed so beautifully unwritten
one millioncrickets and two spoken words
emotion disguised by their beauty
she must stay elegant
sophisticated
she could never have pierced the night with
I LOVE YOU!!
so she faltered
and whispered
as the first tear reached her lips
merry christmas
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"symphonies in minor keys"
That's a nice little rhyme, and an interesting image. However, you may want to watch out. I saw that you used it (well, a variation. "unwritten symphonies in minor keys") in another poem, and repeating such unique phrases, no matter how lovely they are, can end up making them stale and ineffective.
Wait... the whole symphonies in minor keys thing... if you meant the two poems that use this image to be companion poems, I don't think it's a problem.
^ This poem was actually written after that one, and it is a reference.
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